明强小学对口初中2016:2007年高考英语满分作文重庆卷 江苏卷 浙江卷

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　　据报道，7岁的美国女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后处于极度的痛苦之中。美国抗癌协会决定，每当Amy收到一封慰问信，就给她增加3美分的治疗款。

　　假如你是新华中学的学生李华，请你用英文给Amy写一封慰问信，主要内容应包括：

　　1.自我简介；

　　2.得知的情况；

　　3.表示鼓励；

　　4.打算为她做什么；

　　5.祝她早日康复。

　　注意：

　　1.信的格式已为你写好；

　　2.信中不得出现你的真实情况；

　　3.词数100左右；

　　4.请在答题卡上做答。

　　Dear Amy,

　　Yours,

　　满分文(一)

　　Dear Amy,

　　Im Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! Im sure you will win. It is reported that the America anticancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　名师点评：

　　本文依照要求，涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了高中常见的句式，如Im sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等，都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用恰到好处地修饰了文章，行文自然而通顺，值得学习。

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　　好词1.realize v.意识到2.promise v.允诺3.donate v.捐赠

　　好句1. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.

　　我很遗憾地得知你身患肺癌，给你带来了巨大的痛苦。

　　好处：which引导限制性定语从句。

　　2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!

　　因此，坚强地与疾病做斗争吧！

　　Dear Amy,

　　My name is Li Hua, a student from Xinhua Middle School in China. I have got to know that you got lung cancer and are in great pain. Sorry to hear that. But since you are young, the disease wont be very serious and you can beat it. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anticancer association will donate. For every letter, they give three cents. So I will try as hard as possible to persuade my friends to write to you so as to help you get enough money to cure the disease. Im sure you will be OK soon.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　名师点评：

　　文章整体来说一气呵成，衔接自然。通过诸如原因状语从句的使用，使得文章内容饱满，过渡自然，较好地使用了诸如but，so之类的连词。文章使用了“the +比较级，the +比较级”的句式，十分出彩。

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　　好词1. cure v.治愈2. association n.协会3.donate v.捐赠

　　好句1. But since you are young, the disease wont be very serious and you can beat it.

　　但是因为你还比较年轻，疾病不会很严重，你能够战胜它。

　　好处：since，引导原因状语从句。

　　2. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anticancer association will donate.

　　据说你收到的信越多，美国抗癌组织捐给你的钱就越多。

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　　2007年4月29日上午10点到11点，全国亿万学生阳光体育活动在各地大中小学校同时举行。江苏省1100万学生积极参与了这项活动。

　　教育部倡导学生：

　　●每天锻炼一小时

　　●健康工作五十年

　　●幸福生活一辈子

　　请你根据以上提示，用英语准备一份发言稿，向同学们讲述一下阳光体育活动的有关情况，并就高三学生是否需要每天花一小时锻炼，谈谈你的看法及理由。

　　注意：

　　1.发言稿应包括以上所有信息，要有适当发挥；

　　2.词数：120词左右(发言稿的开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数)；

　　3.参考词汇：阳光体育活动 ——a national student sports program;

　　教育部——the Ministry of Education。

　　Good afternoon, everyone,

　　满分文(一)

　　Good afternoon, everyone,

　　The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00am~11:00am on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.

　　The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.

　　In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!

　　Thank you!

　　名师点评：

　　本文的结构十分明晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段，前两段叙述，后一段发表观点，典型的作文结构。在句式使用上，作者用法多样，使用了独立结构和虚拟语气，十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。

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　　好词1.wage v.发动2.aim v.瞄准3. advocate v.提倡

　　好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.

　　教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动，能够健康地活50年。

　　好处：advocate，其后接虚拟语气，可以省略情态动词。

　　2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records.

　　如果我们不进行运动，我们的学习成绩就不会很好。

　　Good afternoon, everyone,

　　Its my honor to be here to give you a speech. On April 29，2007 the national student sports program was held from 10∶00am~11∶00am in many primary and middle schools all over China. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program. In Jiangsu, about 11 milloin students took part in the activity.

　　The theme of this program is “do exercises for one hour per day, work for 50 years healthily and lead a happy life”. In my viewpoint, this is quite good for us senior students. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future. That will be very good. So boys and girls，come and join us now!

　　Thank you!

　　名师点评：

　　文章的结构很清楚，内容和要点把握得也比较完整。本文十分符合演讲稿的要求，写得比较出色。第一段中用了强调句，指出了发起项目的主体。作者用并列的方式解释了主题，十分出色。定语从句也用的很好、很到位。

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　　好词1. promote v.促进2. foundation n.基础3. gain v.获得

　　好句1. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program.

　　是教育部推动了这个计划。

　　好处：强调句的使用十分准确。

　　2. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future.

　　每天锻炼一小时我们的身体就会很健康，而这也为将来打下了坚实的基础。

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　　在英语课堂上，你喜欢你的老师授课时只用英语，还是英语、汉语兼用？某英语杂志社就此话题邀请中学生发表看法。请你围绕“How do you prefer your English classes to be taught? In English, or in both English and Chinese?”这个问题，选择一种授课形式，写一篇英语短文。

　　授课形式一：只用英语

　　优点：有助于提高听说能力等

　　缺憾：不易听懂等

　　结论：……授课形式二：英语、汉语兼用

　　优点：易于理解等

　　缺憾：英语氛围不浓等

　　结论：……

　　注意：词数100~120，短文开头已给出(不计词数)。

　　参考词汇：atmosphere氛围。

　　满分文(一)

　　I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about. The teacher first teaches the class in English, and then she explains those that are hard to understand to us so that we get a better knowing of the passage. That will be good for us.

　　However, teaching the class in two languages will make the English atmosphere not so strong. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.

　　Except for the disadvantage, I think it is really good to hear two languages in classes. It can make us more familiar with the foreign culture.

　　名师点评：

　　审题是作文的第一要素，本文的审题准确无误。无论是要点的把握还是结构的组织都证明了这一点。本文运用多种复杂句式，整体看来是不错的。文中的一个复合句式显示了作者的英语功底。其他出彩短语的使用也很地道，可以参看好句中的分析。

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　　好词1.advantage n.优点2.be familiar with，对某人熟悉3. atmosphere n.气氛

　　好句1. I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about.

　　我更喜欢采用双语教学，其优点是可以更好地理解老师的话。

　　好处：定语从句很好地组织了复杂句，同时prefer等词组的使用很地道。

　　2. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.

　　那些希望英语授课的学生们可能会失望了。

　　I prefer my English classes to be taught only in English because it is helpful for us to improve the ability of speaking and listening in a very short time. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress. Thats why I prefer total English. However, since we are all English beginners, its really hard to understand all that the teacher says. Sometimes we need Chinese explanation. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but also using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.

　　名师点评：

　　本文写作十分成功。语言和句式是本文最大的特点。好词中词汇的使用，将作者的意思表达得完整而准确，从而映衬了词汇的重要性；其次，本文的句式以复杂句为主，表语、定语和状语从句的使用都十分到位。

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　　好词：1. immerse v.沉浸2. explanation n.解释3. make progress 取得进步

　　好句：1. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress.

　　我对英语学习和外国文化有着浓厚的兴趣，因此我想沉浸在英语的学习氛围中，使得我能更快地进步。

　　好处：be immersed in 沉浸其中；so that 表示目的。

　　2. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.

　　因此，我的观点是，用英文教授，同时对于一些难以理解的内容用中文进行辅助讲解。

　　好处：表语从句使用正确。